An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

Development in professional life is the aim of everyone in
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from their native land to overseas for upgrading
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lifestyle and standard of living.There is a new trend in
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society,that
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young employers like doctors and teachers
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to other developed
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about
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the problems
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arised
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can be alleviated. Job holders
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to other nations, leaving their homeland behind in search of outstanding quality of life.
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,the bulk departure of the folks
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the motherland with the lack of enthusiastic younger workers on whom the nation may rely for future expansion and evolution which
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make
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the land more poor.
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less in
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and that will again devastate the country into
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situation like financial debt. To tackle
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these
countries
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the native land.
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national
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to get support to enrich the professionals with attractive salaries and resources.
To conclude
,lack of proper remuneration or basic amenities are the reasons that prevent people
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in the fatherland and
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over
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other places to make their future safe.Nations can work for each other to upbringing the backward
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economic support and I believe that many will choose to live in their own homeland if enough awareness is given about the future of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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