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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

#professionals #doctors #teachers #countries #work #situation
Development in professional life is the aim of everyone in
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moves
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 from their native land to overseas for upgrading
the
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 lifestyle and standard of living.There is a new trend in
the
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society,that
the
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young employers like doctors and teachers
migrates
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 to other developed
countries
 to work.
This
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discuss
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about
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the problems
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that arised
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arised
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arise
arisen
raised
 because of
such
 migrations and how
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 can be alleviated. Job holders
moves
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 to other nations, leaving their homeland behind in search of outstanding quality of life.
Firstly
,the bulk departure of the folks
affect
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 the motherland with the lack of enthusiastic younger workers on whom the nation may rely for future expansion and evolution which
inturn
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make
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 the land more poor.
Secondly
,as the candidates resettle somewhere rich,the number of taxpayers
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 less in
count
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 and that will again devastate the country into
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 situation like financial debt. To tackle
this
 situation,the government of
the
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these
countries
 should associate campaigns to provide awareness about the valuable contribution they can make
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 the native land.
Additionally
,poorer
countries
 can seek
for
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national
aids
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 to get support to enrich the professionals with attractive salaries and resources.
To conclude
,lack of proper remuneration or basic amenities are the reasons that prevent people
staying
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from staying
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 in the fatherland and
traveling
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over
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 other places to make their future safe.Nations can work for each other to upbringing the backward
countries
 for
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economic support and I believe that many will choose to live in their own homeland if enough awareness is given about the future of the country.
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