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Reading is more educational than watching videos or TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#videos #tv
The question around our education nowadays is, if watching videos or television
are
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 better than reading. Wherever you go or study, the internet or
screen
 time to learn is very common and I believe is more than a book. Regardless, reading is the most superior and rich than
screen
.
However
,
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 o people have some kind of
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 memory or busy life,
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that
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 they end up
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choosing
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 way. First and foremost, unfortunately, reading is not anymore a common mode to study.
However
, some people since infancy that had
this
 type of habit, for sure, independent if some class need
screen
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, they will like and have
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pleasure
 in reading to learn. I firmly write that because, reading
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 evidence, growth,
confidence
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 and it is able to
teaching
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 new words, means and context.
Secondly
, a number of
persons
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 would rather
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watch videos and television to absorb some information. It is common,
someone
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for someone
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 with
photography
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a photography
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 memory or
like
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 to learn in
a more dynamic ways
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a more dynamic way
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. Despite
this
, all around the world, the population do not
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 spend much time reading, they want to work or do another thing.
As nowadays
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, there are numerous options to gain knowledge, it is obvious the choice will be across the
screen
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that reading is more educational than videos or television, it is a key to our future with
profund
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profound
 knowledge
aquisition
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acquisition
, because to read we
do not lost nothing
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, just gain.
Noneteless
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Nonetheless
, even though the choice
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 just screens, there
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 for sure some loss of information.
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