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Some experts believe that it's better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #school #outweigh
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children
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 if foreign
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primary schools.There are both pros and cons
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secondary
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, it is more obvious that there will be so many difficulties they have to face. As the brightest memory for a person turns out to be at the age of primary
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age is the most suitable time for
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 phonological learning and some grammar sentences.
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, simple
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 can be taught to the
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 is not an
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 subject for most of the kids.It is not similar to
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Mathematics, science and arts.
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thought as
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 not easy subject since their childhood,there would be a problem when they have to learn it seriously. It can become a subject they fear most. Because of
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 reasons,if we see from
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other perspectives, it is better
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 at primary
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 rather than secondary
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.Because of the complication of a
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, it should be learned slowly and regularly.If it
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, it will be easier at the beginning.
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 who learn a foreign at primary
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 are good at it than those who learn it in secondary
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. In conclusion, the foreign
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books for kindergarten phonetic cards.It can make the
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 speak proficiently when they become adults.
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