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Band 6

the diagram below shows how photographs can be produced using digital photographic equipment.

the diagram below shows how photographs can be produced using digital photographic equipment.
The diagram depicts the process
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 using digital photographic equipment in order to produce photographs. In the first part of
process
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, the production of photographs
need
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 three main tools,
digital
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a digital
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 camera,
computer
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a computer
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 and printer. Following, with digital cameras we can do many stuff
such
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 as recording,
capturing
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and capturing
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image
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images
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 and smart
card
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cards
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.
Then
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, by downloading
image
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images
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 from the
,
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camera we transfer
it
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them
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into
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 our PC to continue the procedure by editing pictures or improving the resolution and quality.
In addition
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, we can send the file by email to another email address or we can store a picture by using compact disks. Meanwhile, it would be perfect to have a printer to print different styles of
photos
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, colour
photos
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 and black and white
photos
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 but it is necessary to put photo paper in order to print them.
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, the process contains three parts and
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finally
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 we can generate
photos
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 from digital equipment.
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, we have two options, to share it, store it for the future or continue the cycle by printing them.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words photos with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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