There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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academic success has gained

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paramount importance among young

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, some argue that non-academic courses are equally important

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core

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, the mounting pressure amongst today's youth to achieve high educational standing is

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the large amount of workforce

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being released into the

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market every year.

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a majority of graduates have a similar background, employers assess the candidate based on quality, which is reflected by the grades

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fundamental

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applying for an office job they are only evaluated based on their capability to calculate

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sales and profits. It is instances like these that compel

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to consider removing non-core

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attention towards the fundamental courses. On the other side of the argument are the

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who want the non-academic programs to be part of the schooling. Their point of view on

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issue is

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valid as not every student aspires

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office or a sales job.

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who aspire to become a chef or excel in sports may benefit from these

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it is important for young minds to have a platform for all interests as everyone and schools should be responsible for providing these facilities. Though there are different arguments and reasons supporting both sides of

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problem, I personally believe that having non-academic courses is important as they can equip

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youngsters with general life skills and teach them the ability to think

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I disagree with the idea of solely focusing on academic work in schooling.