The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
The line graph compares the daily amount of
electric
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usage during
summer
and
winter
in Britain and the pie chart shows the proportion of
the
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electricity
used
for
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.
Overall
, the demand for
electricity
in
winter
is much higher than in
summer
. The majority of the consumption of
electricity
is used for heating water and rooms. Demand for
electricity
is at its lowest in both
summer
and
winter
between 6am and 9am, at around 14000
units
and just above 30000
units
respectively. The usage of
electricity
in
summer
continues to rise and reaches
at
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peak of 20000
units
between 12 noon and 3pm,
while
the figure in
winter
in the afternoon increases and
at
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its highest between 9pm and midnight, at around 43000
units
. Most British people
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electric power for heating rooms and water, it accounts for 52.5% of the proportion.
Followd
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Followed
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by 17.5% of
population
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using
for
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washing machines, ovens and kettles. The remaining 30% shows
an
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equal
pecentages
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percentages
percentage
for lighting, tv and radio
catagory
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category
, and
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaners, food mixers and electric tools
group
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groups
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Vocabulary: Replace the words summer, winter, electricity, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demand for electricity
  • typical days
  • line graph
  • seasonal variation
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • exceeds
  • units of electricity
  • distribution of electricity usage
  • heating
  • water heating
  • combined total
  • major uses
  • lighting
  • ovens
  • kettles
  • washing machines
  • miscellaneous appliances
  • electronics
  • total usage
  • account for
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