Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are many
zoos
in the world for local and international tourists. Some
people
criticize that we should not build a zoo to keep the wildlife for any purpose,
while
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others support the idea that
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a zoo
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can be an ideal place for
protecing
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protecting
animals
. I believe that
zoos
are good places for
people
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both education and conversation. There are
few
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a few
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reasons for
people
who
against
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are against
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to keep
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keeping
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wild
animals
in
zoos
.
First,
many wild
animals
live in natural habitats where they have
ability
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the ability
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to adapt to that environment, there is no reason for
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to change
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way of their living.
Second,
the
animals
in
zoos
will lose their ability for hunting and social skills with
their
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same species. It means they can not survive once they are released to their own habitats again.
Third,
some
people
also
think that it is inhumane for wild
animals
live
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in closed and
artifical
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artificial
areas which are not natural places.
However
, my view is that
zoos
have several purposes with benefits.
Zoos
normally are popular tourist
destination
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destinations
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in many countries to attract worldwide visitors, and
it
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they
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can make money for
conservation
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for
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endangered and extinct species.
Then
,
zoos
also
have a
edcational
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educational
purpose,
for example
, teachers will bring children for visiting and teach the younger generation
for
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protect wildlife.
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Furthermore
, some
zoos
are a place to conduct scientific research by working with local universities,
it
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enables us to know more the wild
animals
in order to increase the numbers of endangered and extinct species. In conclusion,
although
zoos
may not
a
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perfect location for wild
animals
to live, they provide a
shelther
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shelter
for those extinct and endangered
animals
to lower the rate of
declining
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