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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious air pollution and uses up world's resources. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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In the era of industrialisation, the World has witnessed extensive
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travel
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 in the past few years.
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 has sparked discussion on whether
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travel
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 should be restricted as it contributes to toxic emissions and uses up the world's resources. I disagree, because restricting aeroplanes will not alleviate
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 caused by them but taking measures to build
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 which could utilize fewer resources can be useful. Extensive
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travel
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 has led to two main
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.
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, there are many
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 running from one country to another country and even to domestic places for almost every hour.
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 kind of overutilization of
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 causes serious
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 pollution as it releases toxic gases which contribute towards a rise in the earth's temperature. A recent study says that the earth's temperature was 2 degrees cooler than before during the
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travel
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 ban at the time of covid pandemic.
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, aeroplanes end up using a lot of
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 because of the
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 that are designed to carry passengers at higher altitudes. Especially, cargo planes are built with heavy
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 to carry loads over long distances, so these planes utilize more energy than domestic planes which are used to carry passengers. Despite these
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, I don't think restricting
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travel
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 can alleviate the situation.
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, governments should focus on investing in the aircraft industry and encourage researchers to utilize the latest technologies and build eco-friendly machines which utilize less
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 and produce less toxic gases.
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, if
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travel
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 is restricted it might be a loss to people as they will not be able to meet their families residing in foreign countries. In the era of globalization, it is common to have children
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 abroad to pursue higher studies,if the
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 are restricted
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 the families may not be able to attend important occasions like graduation ceremonies. In conclusion,
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 extensive
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travel
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 can lead to
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such
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 as
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 pollution and overutilization of
fuel
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 but restricting
flights
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 is not the solution as people may not be able to meet their families living in different countries. I think the solution is for the governments should invest to build more efficient
engines
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 which can produce less emission and burn less
fuel
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.

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