The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.
These pie charts depict the mins sources of energy (
oil
,natural gas, coal, hydroelectric power
and nuclear power
) in the 1980s and 1990s in the United States of America.
It is clear from the graph that, oil
had the highest proportion compared to the other sources throughout the period.
According to
what is shown, oil
was at 42% in 1980. After that, it had a significant decrease to reach 33% in 1990. As for natural gas, it witnessed a tiny dip to reach at
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percent
in 1990.
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per cent
Moreover
, between 1980 and 1990 the
coal experienced a high increase to get at its peak at 27 Correct article usage
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percent
.
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per cent
On the other hand
, the
nuclear Correct article usage
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power
had
doubled the percentage from 5% to 10% to be at 10 Unnecessary verb
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per
cent in 1990.
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Whereas
, the
hydroelectric Correct article usage
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power
sustained
at the same level throughout the whole span.
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is sustained
To sum up
, we could say that oil
,natural gas and coal had some changes while
hydroelectric power
stayed at the same level throughout the interval.Submitted by asem2017asem2017 on
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