The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
The bar chart illustrates data about how weekly allowance
are
being spent by families in a country between 1968 and 2018. Units are measured in percentage.
Change the verb form
is
Overall
, it can be seen that the families spent most of their weekly income
on food and leisure activities.
To begin
with, food had the highest percentage of weekly income
spent by families in the year 1968 exactly just at
35% and decreased dramatically to about 16% in 2018. Change preposition
apply
Then
, the housing stood at 10% of weekly income
in 1968 which later experienced a growth at approximately 19% in 2018. Leisure activities had the highest percentage in 2018 at 23% and experienced a sharp decline in 1968 to 9%.
Following
this
, household goods
had the same pattern of average weekly allowance spent in 1968 and in 2018 at around 7%. Next,
transport
was at 14% in 2018 and decreased gradually to 7% in 1968. Personal Add an article
the transport
goods
, fuel and power had similar
Add an article
a similar
level
of Fix the agreement mistake
levels
income
in 2018 at 4% and personal goods
increased by two percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
the
fuel and power in 1968. Correct article usage
apply
Finally
, personal goods
was
about 7% in 1968 and fell slightly below 5% in 2018.Change the verb form
were
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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