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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.
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The following charts provide data about the
price
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 of tickets on one airlane between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over two weeks in 2013.
Overall
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, the highest
price
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 to Melbourne was on
Monday
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 in 1
week
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while
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 the highest
price
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 for the
second
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week
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 was on Friday. The
price
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 in the first
week
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 to Melbourne the
price
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 was fluctuating throughout the whole period. The lowest prices were on Tuesday and Wednesday, they were both the same over 30
dollars
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. It was
also
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 the same days and
price
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 in
week
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 2. One of the main differences was
Monday
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, in comparison, 1
week
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 was 80
dollars
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, and the
second
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week
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 was 30
dollars
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 less.
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,
according to
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 the information below, in the first
week
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, the prices for tickets to Sydney were 60
dollars
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 on
Monday
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,
in contrast
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, the
second
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week
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 was cheaper( 40
dollars
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). The three days after
Monday
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 were the same, the
price
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 was approximately 30
dollars
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. The highest
price
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 in the
second
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week
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 was on Friday but still was 20
dollars
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 cheaper than the first
week
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.

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