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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.
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The bar graphs indicate the fluctuation of the ticket expenses on
one
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 airline between Melbourne and Sydney in Australia, over the two weeks in 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 flight
tickets
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 were more expensive from Friday to
Monday
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 than Tuesday, Wednesday, and Thursday when it came to both ways between the cities.
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, compared to the 1st week, the
Monday
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tickets
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 became cheaper in the second week. Looking at the charts more closely,
one
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 can see that the money, which the customers spent on aeroplane
tickets
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 from Sydney to Melbourne in Australia, had not changed aside from
one
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 on
Monday
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.
Monday
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’s ticket prices plummeted to 40 AUD, which was almost half of
one
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 in the first week. With regard to the
tickets
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 from Melbourne to Sydney,
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 the prices on Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday, and Sunday were
also
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 stable (40, 40, 40, and 60 dollars each),
however
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, there were slight decreases on
Monday
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, Friday, and Saturday, falling by 40, 60, and 50 AUD respectively.

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