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In many countries, people throw away a lot of food from restaurants and shops. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away?

#countries #people #food #restaurants #shops #waste #amount
Food
 waste is a growing global problem. Produce
is being dump
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 away from a plethora of
food
 counters in various nations. In my opinion, low
prices
 of
food
is
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are
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probable
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the probable
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 reason for wasting
a
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food
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food
 and awareness can be
applicable
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the applicable
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 solution to tackle
this
 problem. To embark with, one of the obvious reasons
of
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food
 wastage in tremendous
amount
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amounts
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 is
low
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the low
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prices
 of crops.
Due to
modern
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 technological revolution in farming,
quantity
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 and quality of
food
 is inclined. In turn,
according to
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food
produce
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 and supply, determines that
prices
 of
food
has
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 been declined which ultimately results in expanding
food
 purchases.
For instance
, a survey from FAO revealed that 50
percent
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 of
food
prices
 are dropped since
from
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the
last
 decade,
therefore
,
masses
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the masses
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 started purchasing and wasting more
food
. To solve
this
 issue, making awareness
by
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government
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the government
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 among ordinary people is immensely important. To elaborate
it
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, social media platforms
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, News Channel, and YouTube can be used by higher authorities to make individuals hyper-vigilant about the problems of wastage of
food
.
Moreover
,
country
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a country
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 suffering from scarce of supplies
such
 as Korea can be
the
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 excellent example for the government to show how
this
 nation has been
suffered
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 and people are dying from
shortage
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a shortage
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 of supplies in
area
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the area
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. In conclusion, cheap rates of
food
 allowed
unfortunate
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the unfortunate
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 trend of throwing away
food
 to continue
whereas
 awareness can be
straightforward
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a straightforward
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 approach done by
ministry
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the ministry
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overproduction
  • inefficient
  • supply chains
  • perception
  • disposable
  • replaceable
  • awareness
  • education
  • regulations
  • redistribution
  • donation
  • portion control
  • inventory management
  • public awareness campaigns
  • attitudes
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