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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 it is considered by some people that the promotions are so prevalent and
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 why the target people may not consider it, there are some other opinions who think that the commercial plays a vital role
to attract
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 customers. In my opinion, I believe that because of the availability of social
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 made advertising commonplace, but still
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it is a good way to own users. On one hand, a good cohort of the public thinks that
advertisings
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 are so ubiquitous and can be seen not only in the print
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 in electronic
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 too. We are bombarded by the jingles and the messages of those ads and feel bored . Even the feeling may get exacerbated and that's why pay no concentration.
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 , during a cricket match, the same promotion repeats and we ignore them entirely
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 failing to persuade us. Another reason is that we have a perception that products without good quality and commitments must need advertising to make
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good sales .
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 , there are contrasting views too as it is the best and ever practised way to reach the audiences. Through promotion it is easy to get customers' concentration by using social and any other means of
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 may come to know about the products or services.
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people may get fascinated after watching a video clip from a well-known cinema actor and buy the advertised product.
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 , in my opinion, though ads can be found everywhere, still it is
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good
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media
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 to provide customers
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informtaion
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information
 on products.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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