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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the enviornment. What damage does plastic do to the enviornment ? What can be done by government and individual to solve the problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #enviornment #damage #government
All the products that are made of
plastic
is
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 part of the
non -renewable
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non-renewable
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 energy
or
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source on our planet .
Plastic
 is deemed as
silent
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 killer of the green and healthy
enviornment
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environment
 of the earth starting from land ,air and to ocean ,
plastic
 is everywhere nowadays and it is bringing catastrophic repercussions on
life
 of human being
os
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as
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 well as
environment
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the environment
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. To minimise the damage done by
plastic
 not only
government
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the government
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 but we
individuals
 are equally responsible to reduce its usage. There is no second thought that how
plastic
 is detrimental to our environment.
Plastic
 is one of
that
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source
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sources
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 whose disposal is
very
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a very
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 big challenge for our society .
Hence
 , we have heaps of
waste
plastic
 on each and every corner of land on
earth
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Earth
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.
Moreover
due to
 its non-renewable nature ,
plastic
waste
 is now taking
a
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 shape of mountains in some
region
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regions
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.
Due to
this
 it is polluting
air
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the air
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 , disturbing
life
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the life
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 balance on earth, and trees are not getting enough nutrition, which
in
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result
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 affects the rain cycle as well. In one of the recent surveys done by "the daily journal" one of the
well known
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 publication
house
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houses
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, they mentioned that more than 60% of
plastic
waste
 is now occupying the space in underwater oceans. Which in result polluting the water resources of
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the enviornment
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enviornment
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environment
. It is deteriorating the
life
 span of creatures which takes shelter in water . Even they might be consuming
lot
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a lot
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 of
plastic
waste
 which in result indirectly
affect
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affects
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 human
life
 in
a
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 form of seafood. Indeed, to save our
enviornment
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environment
individuals
has
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have
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 to step up, it is not
government's
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the government's
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 sole responsibility. We both have to work hand in hand to improve
this
disasterous
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disastrous
 situation. To start with,
government
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the government
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 has to run large campaigns on reducing the usage of
plastic
 in all forms.
Also
, they can run different types of advertisements on television,
in
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and in
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 cinema houses to make people aware
about
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of
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 the hazardous post effects of
plastic
waste
. ,
Moreover
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government
 can put strict eyes on
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 of
plastic
 like
plastic
bags
 must be made of 0.5 microns or greater to improve
its
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their
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 quality. And make it reusable to some extent. Without the support and help of ,
individuals
 these effects are near to useless.
Hence
, each and every human on the planet has to take responsibility to reduce the usage of
plastic
bags
 . We all need to start using cloth
bags
instead
 of
plastic
bags
. We all need to come together to clean the heaps of
plastic
waste
 from our society , and all need to work together in finding out a way to safe disposal of
plastic
. In conclusion,
this
 enormous distribution to our
enviornment
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environment
 by
plastic
 has to be resolved and stopped quickly by a joint operation of
government
 and
individuals
.
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