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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

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Nowadays,
traveling
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travelling
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 is famous around the world.Many local citizens
who
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are always hospitality with
tourism
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 .
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 , other narrow inhabitants are not welcome to
tourism
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 because
the
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of the
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 impact
of
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on
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 the environment
throughout
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through
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tourism
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 throws garbage.So, I will tell you why local residents are both welcoming to
tourists
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 and wary of foreigners.
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, currently, the waste issue is the biggest affecting local
people
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 because many
travelers
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who
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have no responsibility for littering, so they just keep littering without caring about whether it has any impact on
people
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.
Due to
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 the large number of
tourists
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, the
government
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 cannot control the problem of littering. It negatively
impact
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on
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people
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’s standard of living.
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, In
ThaiLand
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Thailand
, the population is a huge
problems
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problem
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 because they
had
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 a lot of rubbish on the beach.
In
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furthermore
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 , the
price
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 is that it
also
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 affects
people
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.
Many
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 famous
place
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places
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, local
people
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 in those places are willing to raise
prices
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 to make a profit.That why’s ,a large number of
people
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 with average living standards cannot live in places with high
prices
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.
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 , In VietNam , DaLat city where
is
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high
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a high
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 living standard , many local food has high
price
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 from 50.000-100.000 dong . It strongly affects local
people
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.
Although
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 reduces waste, it will help
people
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 feel a better quality of life.
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the
government
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 needs to sign a ban on littering at tourist attractions , so they will not throw rubbish . The environment will become cleaner.
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, In
singapore
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Singapore
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, their ministry always
have
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has
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sign
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signed
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 a ban and harsh laws on littering.
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, the
government
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 must force restaurants to have
prices
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 listed for
tourists
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, so it can control
prices
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 in a reasonable way so as not to affect
people
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. In Danang
city
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, they
dont
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don't
 have high
prices
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 for
tourist
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tourists
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 because of the
price
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 control by
local
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the local
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government
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Although
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 controlled, it
also
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 depends on the awareness of
people
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 and
tourists
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 In short,
people
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's attitudes towards
tourists
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 depend on many factors, both positive and negative.
Tourism
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 brings economic benefits and cultural exchange
,
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 but
also
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 causes environmental and
price
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 problems. The
government
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 needs to implement effective management measures, and
tourists
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 need to be conscious of respecting local culture and environment.

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