The pie charts below show the avarage household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010
The provided pie chart presented information about the amount of 5 other goods and services decreased
category
the household expenditures (Change to a plural noun
categories
hosing
, transport,food, health care and other goods and services)in between Japan and Malaysia in 2010 years.
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housing
It is clear that
the proportion of spendingChange preposition
on
while
housing and food increased.
We can see that the most preferred the
household Correct article usage
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expenditures
which was used by people was other goods and services making up 29% in Japan Fix the agreement mistake
expenditure
however
this
figures dropped to 29% in Malaysia.
20% of Correct determiner usage
these
pie
chart belonged to transport which was the fourth wanted the household expenditures.Correct article usage
the pie
This
householding expenditure fall to 10%.
By contracts, the
health care was the least Correct article usage
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of
householding expenditure between Japan and Malaysia Change preposition
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however
this
experienced fall to 3%.
The figure for food was representing 24% and jumped to 27%.
Regarding details, housing was chosen by people with 21% while
this
figure grown
to 34%.Add the auxiliary verb
grew
has grown
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