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the bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.

the bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.
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The 3 graphs provide information about how the situation of commuting is in some
countries
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 in Europe.
Overall
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, the use of cars outweighs by far all other means of transportation
such
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 as bus, train, metro, and bike.
According to
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 the commuting
time
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 chart, all the
countries
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 spend more
time
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 than the
EU
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 average except Italy. Looking at details, the
EU
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 average of travel by car, approximately 10000 km, is more than eightfold the
EU
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 average
of
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for
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 other commuting means. When it comes to
average
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the average
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 of travel by car, all the
countries
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 apart from Germany and Spain were higher than the
EU
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 average. Appealing is the number of other means by Denmarks which is slightly
lessthann
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less than
 3 times the average. We can notice from the commuting
time
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 chart, that the UK followed by Germany are the two
countries
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 with the highest commuting
time
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, both of them more than twofold the number of Italy. Spain was nearly equal to the
EU
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 average.
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