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Men and women are capable of doing all jobs equally well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
For the
last
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 several decades, both males and females have been working in similar fields.
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, I strongly disagree that their working efficacy is the same in all roles for two reasons.
Body paragraph 1
First of all, women and
men
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 have completely different
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 physiology. It is generally accepted that apart from the reproductive endocrine system, human anatomy, including the musculoskeletal system, is the same.
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, the strength of the muscles is remarkably different.
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, women’s bodies cannot usually tolerate the same amount of pressure and force as
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’s
x
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, leading to inequality in performance in the same jobs.
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, in many parts of the world, construction is a male-dominated career since they have to lift and carry a lot of very heavy materials.
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, physically demanding roles are more suited to
men
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.
Body paragraph 2
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, psychological features play an essential role in job productivity. Usually, women have more empathy and compassion than
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,
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 a high level of estrogen in their blood
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 which affects the limbic system in the brain, which is responsible for human emotions and feelings. The lower level of
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 hormone in
men
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 and the dominance of testosterone accounts for males’ more aggressive attitudes and lack of sympathy.
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 opposite reaction in both genders explains why gender can play a key role in job productivity.
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, more compassion can be seen when females are taking care of patients in nursing homes or hospitals because they have more flexibility and understanding compared to
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 toward those who are suffering from serious diseases.
Conclusion
In conclusion, not only the body’s structural distinctions
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 but
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 different psychological characteristics, prevent males and females from having the same productivity in similar jobs.
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, I believe, not all careers can be done equally well by both genders.

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coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and address the prompt. However, the main points lack sufficient support and development.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear and comprehensive response to the prompt, but the main points lack depth and development. More relevant and specific examples could be included to support the ideas effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • professional abilities
  • personal skills
  • qualifications
  • success stories
  • stereotypes
  • perceptions
  • education and training
  • gender differences
  • social benefits
  • economic benefits
  • gender-diverse workplaces
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