The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.
The given pie chart shows the proportion of the country of birth of
people
residing in Australia and the table presents the area where these
people
live. In general, the majority of
Australian
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Australia
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is the highest leading country and it
seem
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that
this
is a suitable place for residents of other countries to immigrate.
Moreover
, the Netherlands is the least country with birth
people
living in and the majority of
people
preferred to live in is in the cities area than in the rural areas.
According to
the pie chart, almost three-quarters of the total population is born in Australia,
while
people
in other countries account for about 14%, which is twice as much as the UK. New Zealand, China, and the Netherlands born are between 3%, 2% and 1%, respectively. Turning to table information,
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reached the highest peak of 99% of them settling in cities, much higher than
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the Netherlands, the UK, and Australia, at 90%, 89%, and 83%, respectively. New Zealand, show the largest rate of those living in rural areas, at 20%.
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