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While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #university #study #lack #workers #electricians #plumbers
There is no doubt that education cultivated all modern civilizations.
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 some people believe that
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 to university for higher study is important,
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while others
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 argue that practical experience is required in many fields
along with
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 to agree with the statement and in
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 I will support my view with examples.
Firstly
 the most significant
advantages
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 of training is practical knowledge.Everyone must understand that practical work
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theoretical understanding will result in a deep understanding.
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 to create a new telephone,should envisage bookish knowledge to build or use past references before creating a telephone.
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Secondly
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 study of vocational training is the Job prospects.In the current era, most
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the
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companies look for
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professionals with
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 understanding of the tools.As an example:a number of Universities designed curriculum as a per industry requirements.
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, have been updating the pedagogy regularly.
As a result
 the students obtain better roles in the multinational companies.
This
 has been a rising trend all around the globe, helping all classes of professionals and students to rise in their field of work. In conclusion, academic knowledge is must for anyone to understand the basic functionality, but should always be supported with practical understanding, making it more useful for them and for the people they work for.
Therefore
, In my point of view,the vocational training is as important as the theoretical study.
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