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The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.

The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.
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 number of
applicants
 at the Doolittle University year before and the year after
social
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the social
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 media advertising
campaign
, organized by age range and how close the
applicants
 live to the university.
Overall
, it is clear to see there
were
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drastic
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a drastic
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impact
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impacts
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 in the assessment between
age
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the age
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 18-22 who lived
further
 than 100km from
university
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the university
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. The
campaign
 in social media
in
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for
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 who
lives
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whithin
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within
 100km
,
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show
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shows
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 that there
were
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was
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 just
litle
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little
 impact
into
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18
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the 18
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 to 29 age,
while
 others ranged from double numbers in 30 to 39 years.
However
, rocked in
ages
 over 40, being 10
applicants
 to
aproximatly
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approximately
 60.
Conversely
, who live
further
 100km, the
campaign
 impacted the
ages
 18 to 22, rocketed to a shocking rate of 185 to 345
applicants
 and rose almost 100% in
ages
 from 40
ou
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or
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 more. About 23 to 29 years, the advertising
not
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has not
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 changed, but noticed a
litle
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little
 increase in 5
applicants
 among 30-39. In sum, the advertising
campaign
 brought some impacts
in
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differents
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different
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ages
 and
distance
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distances
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 from
college
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the college
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words applicants, campaign, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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