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The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
below given
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 charts show two different
age
 groups of
people
along with
 the data given in percentage on what exactly makes them jolly and content. The data is divided into five different
factors
. Looking at the given information, it is easily noticeable that folks are
majorily
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majority
majorly
 satisfied with achievement at work in both
the
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age
 groups.
In addition
, citizens under 30 include categories of having a good appearance and travelling
whereas
,
people
 over 30 include
factos
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factors
 of Financial Security and Being with Family. As we look briefly at the pie chart of folks under 30, we notice that after achievement at work,
people
 feel happy by doing various hobbies.
Apart from
this
, Travelling and other
factors
 play a small role in making citizens feel calm and content. The humans, belonging over the
age
 of 30 have almost the same percentages of
factors
to
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as
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 that of humans who belong to the
age
 below 30.
However
, achievement at work and hobbies are followed by Financial Security which is
of
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20% and being with family
that
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which
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 contains 14% of
people
's satisfaction. Other
factors
 play a minor role of 10%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, factors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • contributing factors
  • distinct age groups
  • primary sources
  • comprising
  • leading contributors
  • predominant
  • accounting for
  • underscores contrasts
  • prioritize
  • universal aspects of well-being
  • engaging in enjoyable activities
  • source of joy
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