The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart show what makes people most happy for two different age groups. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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charts show two different
age
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groups of
people
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along with
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the data given in percentage on what exactly makes them jolly and content. The data is divided into five different
factors
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. Looking at the given information, it is easily noticeable that folks are
majorily
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majority
majorly
satisfied with achievement at work in both
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age
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groups.
In addition
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, citizens under 30 include categories of having a good appearance and travelling
whereas
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,
people
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over 30 include
factos
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factors
of Financial Security and Being with Family. As we look briefly at the pie chart of folks under 30, we notice that after achievement at work,
people
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feel happy by doing various hobbies.
Apart from
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this
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, Travelling and other
factors
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play a small role in making citizens feel calm and content. The humans, belonging over the
age
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of 30 have almost the same percentages of
factors
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to
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that of humans who belong to the
age
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below 30.
However
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, achievement at work and hobbies are followed by Financial Security which is
of
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20% and being with family
that
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contains 14% of
people
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's satisfaction. Other
factors
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play a minor role of 10%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, factors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • contributing factors
  • distinct age groups
  • primary sources
  • comprising
  • leading contributors
  • predominant
  • accounting for
  • underscores contrasts
  • prioritize
  • universal aspects of well-being
  • engaging in enjoyable activities
  • source of joy
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