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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
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Children are an important age for human development. They will become
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good
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person
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 or not, it
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 on time. Some people think that
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 is the place for them to develop education and
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. But
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 people said that the family is the best place for them to learn how to become a good
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 in the
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. The family is
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 good place to educate the
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 and the parents know what is limited
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 the
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 since they were born. It's easy to teach them when they are a baby and they will learn quickly than we thought. They will learn
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 your
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, behavior, ...
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 why you have to be mindful
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 you
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,
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and what
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taught
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. The
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have
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 the tendency to follow what you do, if you do a bad or a good thing they will imitate it right away . If you want your children
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good
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person
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 in
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society
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, you have to teach them
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 your action right now. We do not need to wait until they go to
school
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 and learn from the teachers. The parent is the most important
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 to develop
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an attitude
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 of the kids and there
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 nothing
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 change the love
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 the family . That’s why they will listen to you
easy
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 than another
person
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such
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 as the teacher. We can not deny the importance of the
school
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. When they turn 4-5 years old,
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 they will go to
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 and they may spend approximately 20 years there. That’s why
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 is
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 good time to water the good seeds for them. The responsibility of the teacher is not only
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 them education, but
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 human religion. I met many teachers who
teach
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 me how to become a good
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. I feel
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about
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 it and I will never forget that
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 of teaching your
student
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students
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 with words,
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you teach with actions. That will make children learn faster and become a good
person
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 in
society
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.
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, I think the family have to train the
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 how to become a good
person
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 in the
society
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 since they were born. And the teachers
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also
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 a part of training the kids.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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