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Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that the success of a person depends on how lucky he or she is.
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 I accept that fortune plays a vital role in
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's achievements, I
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 believe that there are other important factors. On the
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 hand, there are a variety of reasons why
people
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 need luck to attain their goals.
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 of the reasons is that successful
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 often have made life-changing decisions in their careers.
For instance
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, Mark Zuckerberg decided to drop out of Harvard to focus on developing Facebook,
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, he
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 know that
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 would become the biggest social media app in the future.
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, luck can be considered as being born into a rich family. Since
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 would live in perfect conditions with quality education and have a great deal of money, they are more likely to achieve their purposes rather than the poor.
On the other hand
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, hard work and patience are
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 crucial in realizing
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's aims. Specifically, when pursuing a dream, there would be many hardships and challenges that prevent
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 from reaching it so they tend to give up after failing a few times.
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, substantial effort and persistence are indispensable for
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 to be able to accomplish their objectives.
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, it is a fact that there are many
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 succeeded
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 having these qualities. Take Lionel Messi as an example,
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 he was born into a poor family, he still showed tenacity throughout his life and eventually
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 of the greatest football stars in the world. In conclusion, it is certainly true that the importance of luck in facilitating
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 to fulfil their objectives, but
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 is by no means the key factor for everybody to be successful.

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task response
Provide a clear opinion on whether you agree or disagree with the statement to fully address the task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly introduce and summarize your position on the topic to enhance coherence and cohesion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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