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Some peope believe that nowadyas we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#peope #nowadyas #choices
The system which can afford
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mankind to detect
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cancer
isa
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is a
revolution
of
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 our world and it’s called
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photoacoustic imaging. The essence of
this
invantion
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invention
 is using microwaves to scan and define
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pathology of cells, which we get used to
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cancer.
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 development of
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disease
desease
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 there are
occuring
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occurring
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 tissues and we can take
this
 equipment not to prevent
this
 problem, but to find out the exact position of
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 areas,
for instance
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. As an example, the speaker came up with a suggestion to use
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 of pathway for struggling with it, by the facing
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occasion
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 own life, the breast cancer of his relative. His sphere of
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occupation came
handy
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 to
medcine
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medicine
,
becouse
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because
 of the nonordinary approach from the field of science
opitics
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optics
topics
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this
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 way to use microwaves for discovering these degraded cells.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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