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Some people think computers and the Internet are more important in child’s education. Others believe that schools and teachers are essential for children to learn. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #computers #internet #child’s #education #schools #teachers #children
Nowadays, the way we learn
knowledge
 is various
due to
 the popularization of advanced technology which makes studying flexible and easier compared to the past. During the covid-19 everyone benefits from
it
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distance learning and online study resources, allowing
children
 to accept
knowledge
 at home.
While
 they are helpful assistance to students,
but
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schools and
teachers
 are still necessary. Some people believe that computers and the internet had penetrate
in
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the educational sector, and it becomes a vital part of youth teaching.
For example
, during covid-19 distance learning replaced face-to-face
class
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classes
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 which reduce the chance of getting infection with covid-19, even now everything is back to normal but still some
of
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tutorial sessions are conducting via
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internet
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.
Internet
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also
 allows
children
 to catch up on missing
knowledge
 from some video media, like YouTube and The Study Room which I used most frequently. Some online
teachers
 have uploaded useful resources and revision materials on websites, helping students to understand some trick parts from
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book
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books
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 and especially when exams
coming
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 they become
a
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 effective checklist for
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the student
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student
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. Others think schools and
teachers
 are important in
teenagers
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teenagers'
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 study stage.
This
 can be explained by young
children
 are immature and easily led, so
teachers
 be good
guide
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 to them, teaching them how to be a responsible
person
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to
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the
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society and
developing
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 towards to right way, those are more valuable than the basic
knowledge
 we accept from classes.
On the other hand
, School gathers
children
 together, we cultivate other skills as well, critical thinking, communication skills and so on. Allowing us to be confident and
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 the life we expected. From my perspective, the above points are complementary to each other, if we can combine them effectively and applied to
children
’s education, it may have flawless effects. Thinking about how to make them co-exist
instead
 compare the
two-sides
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 of them as they are both vital in
children
’s teaching in the current stage.
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