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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views.

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Nowadays,
teengers
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teenagers
 often wonder whether they ought to continue their studies or get a job ,
while
 many people think that keeping
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 study at a university or college will be the best way to an effective occupation.
however
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, other people claim that working right after school is a better option. On the one hand , students
of
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the
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universities have
a
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better
opportunity
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opportunities
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 for many reasons.
Firstly
,
university
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the university
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curriculumo
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curriculum
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 prepare
student
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the student
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 to meet
academic
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the academic
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 qualification , which employers often require from them .
secondly
,people with
high
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 academic degree have high salary than those without qualifications and
that
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they
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 will be able to live their
llife
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lives
 with
higher
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a higher
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 wage.
for
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For
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 instance, In my country that individuals with a medical degree get a rising pay per year.
Furthermore
,
job
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marker
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market
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 is becoming increasingly competitive since hundred of applicants often chase one position in an organization.
Consequently
 , having a degree is
obvious
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an obvious
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 advantage for getting a job
more
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faster. On
other
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 hand,
teengers
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teenagers
 working after school has an advantage because they will develop their practical skill and real working experience that would never elaborate from academic achievement.
consequently
,they will be enough mature and independent
person
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people
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.
In addition
, working at
early
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an early
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 age could earn money as soon as possible that help them to live and saves some of
money
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the money
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 for their future.
As a result
, they may grow with a personality who
know
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 the value of money and working
this
 lead to
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 their business effectively. In conclusion, studying at a university has
their
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 merits , which offer
an
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apply
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academic achievement,
whereas
 working straight after secondary
schools
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school
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also
 has
an
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 unique benefit that
qualify
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 them for real experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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