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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email -Recommend a new sport that would suitable for your friend to learn -Explain how your friend could learn this sport -Suggest you both learn this sport together

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Dear Jane, Hope you’re well. I’m writing to give my idea about which sport you should learn. I knew that you love playing with water, so when receiving your question, on the top of my head, I thought of swimming. It’s a low-impact sport, but it does wonders for your physical and mental workouts, as it helps you stay in good condition and relieve stress. I believe you will enjoy it. My son, Sun, just learned to swim
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 summer in our local swimming pool which provides coaching for just a small fee. It’s a six-month course, but Sun could swim after two months, so I think you will do the same. After seeing the benefits my son has got from
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 sport, I think it’s time to look after my body, so I’m going to learn it too. Why don’t we start it together
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 autumn when the weather has not been too cool to learn? I’m imagining how joyful we are when we have a vacation on a beach or beside a lake after we conquer
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 activity. I look forward to catching up with you soon. Best regards, Maria
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