Bar chart shows the percentage of time that Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013

Bar chart shows the percentage of time that Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013
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The multiple bar chart demonstrates how much Australian parents contribute to aiding their children in daily activities.
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, mothers' contribution is superior to that of
fathers
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'. Maternal support in dressing has the highest percentage, 72%. Australian mothers unequivocally hold the supreme hand in helping their kids to dress up. Their comparative scores with
fathers
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are 72% versus 1%. These mothers are
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superior in the help given for homework, with more than half of
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support,
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fathers
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only counted for merely one-tenth. There are some activities in which both parents' cooperation demonstrates the highest percentage that
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categorised under two names: playing games and preparing for bed, with corresponding percentages of 70 and 50 per cent.
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,
on the other hand
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, have demonstrated no maximum support in the study. Their highest and lowest contributions were in homework and dressing, 10 and 1 per cent respectively.
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