International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist. Do the advantages of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages.

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A popular belief is that
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international travel is becoming cheaper and
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is opening
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doors to more and more tourists has been considered
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an essential thing for human activities
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as increasing
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economy
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plenty of options rather than using or utilizing the infrastructure, because individuals can follow the modern era to use
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state as paramount elements to get the high quality of product and convenience environment at work. Even though directing the use of people has difficulties and failures to manage, organize, or utilize technology has a huge opportunity to obtain a better result.
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on growth to attract
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productivity,
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will earn more
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and income.
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, focusing on prospering the infrastructure could incline the amount of good-quality products not only for today but
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for the coming days.
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, there are several issues or problems
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international travel
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becoming cheaper and
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opening
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doors to more tourists to become crucial and famous in
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first, terrible obstacles in
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are opening their doors more and more tourist research could obtain and increase the cost of development, because several inhabitants have wished and
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about the easiness of financing.
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, illegal immigrants could become negative impacts or have an ideal opportunity to become potential incomes, these supporting and
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could not be
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and acceptable, because illegal immigrants can make the country poor.
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, if several societies understand and comprehend the infrastructure impact, they will appreciate the meaning of development economics to avoid feeling unemployment in
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society
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, infrastructures have been assumed as paramount elements for
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to know and admit the technological opportunity
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some years ago until today’s era.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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