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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day

#plan #health #centre #b #place
The pictures illustrate a number of changes which
has
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have
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 taken place in
health
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the health
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centre
 after some development from 2005 to now.
It is clear that
 the health
centre
 has experienced
significantly
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 changes in the given time period.
In addition
, the
centre
 has been extended and its
layout
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also
 been changed to meet the needs. On the one hand, the entrance has been moved to the South West side of the building. The reception desk is just near the entrance and there is
also
children's
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 playing area, which is a new inclusion. Meanwhile, there is a large common area in the middle of the
centre
 for clients where seats are available alongside the wall. Minor operations
room
 has
built
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 right next to the Phýiotherapy
room
. There is a
room
 named CR4 has added in
main
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 building.
On the other hand
, we can
also
 see that the car parking area has been extended and developed to make space for more than 18 new parking slots. The main difference is that the size of the garden has been reduced to half its previous size. The fences have
also
 been rebuilt to make
room
 for new areas
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health centre
  • renovation
  • modernization
  • layout
  • consultation rooms
  • treatment rooms
  • pharmacy
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • disabled access
  • technological advancements
  • preventive care
  • rehabilitation services
  • administrative offices
  • community needs
  • public health policy
  • expansion
  • reduction
  • entrance area
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