Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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International
sports
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been part of the culture in different
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. Some
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persevered to produce globally competitive
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by building top notched
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for training rather than putting more effort
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facilities
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that is
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availbale
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available
for everyone. The following paragraphs
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the pros and cons of
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gesture. On the one hand, these top notched
facilities
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made by the government
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helped both
cultural
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the cultural
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and financial development of different
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. To explain, not only that it benefits the improvement of
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the talents
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of the
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it
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serves as a significant employment opportunity for the
people
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. These
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need
people
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to function and with that comes different types of job offers especially to those who are looking to be employed. In that sense, these specialised
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benefits
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different types of
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in the society.
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, each individual and not only the
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should
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be given the opportunity to play
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in a proper
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facility. As the money used for building these specialised
facilities
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is coming from the government, they should
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extend
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gesture to those who are aspiring to be in the
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industry or everyone in
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who will
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benefit from it.
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, as there are more
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who will benefit if the government considers building
sports
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facilities
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in every school, there is
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a great chance that they will be able to provide top notched
atheletes
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athletes
in the future. In my opinion,
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some
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would benefit from building top notched
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for their
athletes
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in terms of improving their culture and financial status, it is equally important to consider fairness in the society and cultural development as
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a whole
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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