The following bar graph compares the age profiles of male and female cinema goers in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following bar graph compares the age profiles of male and female cinema goers in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates, the proportion of people watching movies in theatres for the year 2012.
Moreover
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, the populace is distinguished between men and women
while
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categorizing them into five different
age
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groups.
Overall
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, it is evident that the number of cinema-goers fluctuated
according to
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the
age
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group,
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however
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the cinema was majorly visited by senior citizens. On the one hand, individuals belonging to the
age
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groups of 14-17
years
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and 35-49
years
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showcased the same number of male and female visitors with 7% and 25% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the number of male citizens between 18-24
years
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of
age
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was slightly higher as compared to their other counterparts. In the same manner, the population within 25-34
years
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displayed a similar trend with 23% men and 20% women.
In contrast
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to
this
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, 33% of old ladies who were above 50
years
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of
age
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depicted more interest in cinemas,
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only 29% of the old men accounted for their interest in theatre.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar graph
  • age profiles
  • cinema goers
  • demographic trends
  • percentage
  • attendance
  • age categories
  • gender comparison
  • target audience
  • cinema attendee
  • age-wise breakdown
  • demographic trends
  • highest/lowest attendance
  • noteworthy differences
  • age groups
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