You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Wtire a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course - say how much cookery you have done since the course - suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer

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writing to express my

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the cookery

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held on 23/11/22 by Chef John in your academy.

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, I would like to thank you for organising the cookery

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the cookery

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was amazing. Chef John is truly an inspiration. The way he taught about

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cuisine is very useful. He taught in a very simple way. The pizza, and homemade pasta he taught were nice and he made look easy to cook. He explained

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cuisine in a very precise manner and

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the importance of all the ingredients. The recipe book was

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very understandable and well-written. I tried all the recipes and they came out well.

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tiramisu is an absolute classic. Everybody at my home loved it. ,

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it was a good platform to learn about

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cuisine. I would like you to organise more classes in future. So that I can learn more. Since it was my first

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I would like you to organise baking classes. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Steve

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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