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There is no doubt these days we need more
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life
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whether it
risks
for both
life
in professional and personal and draw my own conclusion .
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the positive
risks
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makes
professional
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your professional
life
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wiser
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in your role Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
in Correct word choice
and also
personal
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your personal
life
you will learn from your experiences if you get risks
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young you will learn much Correct article usage
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is that in Correct your spelling
claim
both
life
we will get more risks
and we will learn from this
experience if the risks
increse
you get more knowledge about Correct your spelling
increase
both
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you will be more wise
with your family or relationship. To illustrate if I Replace the words
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at home and I did not get Correct your spelling
stay
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from my experience or Fix the agreement mistake
risks
nothing
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in
life
how I will learn in other words
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come
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is short should learn from our lessons .
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we will get some disadvantages from risks
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with
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nothing is easy to be successful in your professional lives
if you get more Fix the agreement mistake
life
risks
you will gain some paitent
in Correct your spelling
patience
both
you
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your
Therefore
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lives
life is
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not easy it is difficult so let’s learn from our mistakes and Add a verb
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