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IELTS Essay Task 1: Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Essay Task 1: Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates vehicle preferences among youth in a year in The
UK
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, United
States
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,
France
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, and Italy.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
car
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 is in first position in all of the countries except in
France
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while
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 the motorcycle is in
last
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 position in all of the countries except in the United
States
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. In terms of
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Car
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Cars
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, it is in first position both in the
UK
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 and
France
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 with
exact
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 60
people
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. In Italy, there are more than 70
community
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communities
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 that choose
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car
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a car
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 as their transport.
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, there are 40
people
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 that use
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car
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the car
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 in
France
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 which
are
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 the lowest among these four nations. Regarding Motorcycle, the bar chart tells us that there are only a few
people
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 that use the transport. In the United
States
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, there are only 30
people
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 that use
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 and
then
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 followed by
France
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 with 11
people
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, the
UK
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 with 10
people
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, and Italy with 9
people
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. In terms of
Bicycle
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Bicycles
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, there are 30 young
people
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 that ride bicycles in the
UK
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. The number is decreased to 10
people
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 in
United
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States
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. In
France
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, there are almost 50
people
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 that ride bicycles which is the highest among these four countries.
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, there are more than 10
people
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 that ride bicycles in Italy.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, states, france, car, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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