Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students’ attitude are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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is argued that excellent
teachers
appear to be a major factor contributing to educational success,
whereas
others believe that the
student
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attitude
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more vital.
This
essay would like to discuss both
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views.
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the one hand, There are some reasons why good
teachers
play an
intergral
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integral
part on the development of education.
Firstly
, those
teachers
could support their children to draw inspiration from studying.
In particular
, skilled
teachers
always looking for new teaching methods which could stimulate their
students
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.
As a result
, the
students
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,
instead
of the boring ones.
Secondly
, good educators might help the
student
to expand their knowledge.
It is clear that
when learning with skilled
teachers
, the
students
could have more
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to access the world of knowledge.
Consequently
, the
students
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level of learning performance.
On the other hand
, learner's
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are beneficial in the advancement of education in some ways. The obvious advantage is that
student
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attitude
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could build a strong relationship with their
teachers
. It is obvious that
teachers
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easier to communicate with learners who
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their ambition with
study
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.
Consequently
,
the
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older people may help
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the student
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students
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to
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with the incredible pressure
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learning at school.
Moreover
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good
attitude
,
students
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countless opportunities to study more. In
particulart
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particular
, there are a lot of extra classes that are not required
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to engage. In fact, the
students
who have more ambitious with
study
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are willing to take part in these classes.
Thus
, they may enhance their knowledge, and get a better score. In my opinion, educational success is required for both elements that
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come from
teachers
and
students
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational success
  • good teachers
  • students' attitude
  • structured guidance
  • complex subjects
  • experienced educators
  • teaching methodologies
  • motivate and inspire
  • engaging and effective
  • individual student needs
  • adapt their teaching style
  • improved educational outcomes
  • positive mindset
  • absorbing knowledge
  • curious and eager to learn
  • classroom discussions
  • additional resources
  • positive attitude
  • perseverance
  • academic challenges
  • optimal learning environment
  • synergy
  • dedicated teachers
  • motivated students
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