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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
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The provided line graph displays six different types of energy use in the USA over a 50-year period with a projection until 2030
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Linking Words

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, what stands out from the chart is that the quantity of
Petrol
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, coal and Natural gas saw an upward trend throughout the period,
while
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
Petrol
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 and oil contributed the highest amount of their value, remaining their dominance in the future. The other significant feature of
this
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 graph is that Nucleaar, solar/wind and hydropower energies saw not a significant usage and it is expected that they
remaining
Wrong verb form
remain

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb remaining. Consider changing it.

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 stable until the end of the duration. Looking at the details, in terms of
petrol
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 and Oil, it started at 35 quadrillion units, rising with a fluctuation to relatively just over 40 in 2023. After that, there will be an upward trend, reaching 50 quadrillion units which will be the highest use in the future. As regards coal and natural gas, there was an increase as same as
petrol
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 and Oil.
However
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, coal and natural gas stood at just over 15 and 20 respectively. Now turning to the rest of the sources, there was a slight rise throughout the duration and they started at just below 5, the expectation
to
Change preposition
for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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this
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 was hydropower which was a decrease of a tiny.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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