IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3

IELTS essay, topic: The education system is the only critical factor in the development of a country, agree/disagree (from Target

#ielts #topic #education #system #factor #development #country #target
Education
 plays an imperative
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
all over the progression of the
Country
. Many people may heavily day quality of
education
 as preparing for real-life employment and experience.
However
? there are many other factors that are needed to Prepare the
country
 for Success. we must acknowledge the way the
education
 System Prepares the most individual by equipping them with various skills. Prior to gaining the qualification and practice in the Certain Profession
such
 as nursing, teaching or accountant. It is necessary for individual individual undergo The
education
 system undoubtedly rigorous training I very important in preparing individuals to take on rale leading development of
country
.
However
; it seems. that to produce the gradual prope isn't guarantee to
advancement
Add an article
the advancement
show examples
 of
country
Add an article
the country
a country
show examples
. There are many other for to do something.
On the other
hand
Add a comma
,hand
show examples
 Motiva is an
an
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
individual is one.
Further
more
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
the availability of natural Source and job opportunities are the main effect of the growth of
nat
Correct your spelling
net
show examples
 income. innovation and of many require individual raw materials and Should be a
country
 mine of these.
Perhap
Correct your spelling
Perhaps
 their production. and Perhaps even help to export local markets, family to
game
Add an article
the game
show examples
 giving skilled people. opportunities to
applay
Correct your spelling
apply
 their knowledge in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
and experience in their Profession to productive, continuous GDP. Growth In conclusion,
education
 is
very
Add an article
a very
the very
show examples
 important part
to
Change preposition
of
show examples
 the development of a
country
.
However
 other factor play
also
 important to achieve a
Country
. Progress, growth and Countinay Steady development.
Submitted by anisasaghir2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: