The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. 

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following diagram illustrates the manufacturing
process
of construction bricks.
Overall
, the
process
starts with digging
clay
out of the ground, and the
last
thing in the procedure is delivering it to the right place. The first spet is to harrow the
clay
with the help of an excavator after they put the
clay
on the metal grid in order to make the
clay
smaller. Following that, it gets to the roller after it got smaller, and in the next step of the
process
, they add water and sand to the
clay
and
then
put it through the wire cutter or the mould, so it becomes the shape of a rectangular.
Furthermore
, the bricks
finally
are getting to the oven to dry for 24-28 hours. The next step after they dry is to put them into the oven,
first,
they go to a moderate kiln with 200 C-980 C,
then
the bricks get to the more high temperatures like 870 C- 1300 C and
then
it is put into the cooling chamber for 48-72 hours.
Lastly
, it goes through the
process
of packing and it is ready for delivery.
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