The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the median monthly alter in the prices of three different forms of
metals
namely , copper, nickel,
zinc
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and zinc
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in a specific year.
Overall
,
it is clear that
all types of
metals
fluctuated during the given period, and
also
all
metals
reach the
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peak, lowest, unchanged at
certain
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month
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months
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, and
the
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nickel showed dramatically dropped
comapred
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compared
to other
metals
. Looking at the chart in more detail, regarding nickel ,in
january
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January
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the
precentage
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percentage
of changed highest was 6%
,
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after two months showed declined
at
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to
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around 1 % ,and in Jane reach the lowest point
approximately
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-3 % and
then
from July to
september
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September
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showed unchanged almost -1 % and
then
showed increased until December almost 1%.
In contrast
, in January the zinc lowest
changed
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was almost 1% and after that in February
reach
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reached
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a zenith at approximately 3% and
lowset
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lowest
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at Jane and October
alround
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around
was -1 % and from November until de December showed
highest
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the highest
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changed
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compared to other
metals
from
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1.5 to 2 % .In terms of copper, reach the
lowst
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lowest
lost
changed
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from May to June was
alround
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around
-0.5 %, and from June to October remain constant at 0.5%
and
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in
the
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September has become the second
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metal
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changed
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was approximately 1.5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words metals with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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