IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Below is a chart showing how many hours per week the average person spent on various kinds of media, including watching TV, surfing on the Internet, listening to the radio, and reading printed material. The years covered are from 1990 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

#hours #week #person #kinds #media #tv #internet #radio #years #report #university #lecturer #information
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Different types of
media
Use synonyms
consumption
Use synonyms
 show a different trend that can be seen by the number of hours spent by the average person.
While
Linking Words
 Television and Printed Material as
media
Use synonyms
 show a downward trend, Internet and Radio
consumption
Use synonyms
 duration are going upward.
This
Linking Words
 shows how people prefer to spend more time perceiving information from the latter group of
media
Use synonyms
 types. Having the highest rise in the graph, the Internet is more widely and longer to be consumed potentially because of how many options and services
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
it covers. It offers alternatives for Television and Printed Material in
form
Correct article usage
the form
show examples
 of video streaming services and online magazines. The alternatives are what may potentially
causes
Change the verb form
cause
show examples
 the rise of the Internet and the fall of Television and Printed Material.
While
Linking Words
 for Radio, people still use them to listen to music and news
while
Linking Words
 they are stuck in a traffic jam which is becoming more severe over time.
This
Linking Words
 may still keep the average
media
Use synonyms
 type
consumption
Use synonyms
 number to still rise by a little.
To conclude
Linking Words
, what may help to support the average
media
Use synonyms
consumption
Use synonyms
 rate for any
media
Use synonyms
 type is the versatility of the options offered and how convenient can it be listened or watched to
while
Linking Words
 doing other activities.
Submitted by febrinhidayat on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: