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The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future.

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The images above illustrate the architectural layout of a present college and its future changes.
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,
while
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 the outside of the school remained unchanged, the opposite was seen
in
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on

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 the inside. In the present college, a T-shaped footpath runs along the garden on the top of the map and a car park with 4 lots on the left. From the main entrance, on the left, the reception is located between a classroom and the
library
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. On the opposite side, there is a lunch
area
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 and 2 classrooms.
At the end
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 of the hall, there is a restroom located in the middle of the classroom and the
library
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.
Additionally
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, the bus stop is next to the main road. The T-shaped footpath and garden will be demolished to get more space for the parking
area
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 and the main building. The parking
area
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 will be added
2
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to 2

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more lots so it can have a total of 6. The entrance gate will be relocated. Right after entering, you can see a reception located in the middle of the main hall. On the right of the gate, there is a set of 4 classrooms which replaced the reception and the
library
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. The
library
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 will be moved to the opposite side. Next to the
library
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 is one more classroom. The lunch
area
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 will be
shrinked
Correct your spelling
shrunk

It appears that the verb shrinked is misspelled. Correct the spelling.

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 to have more space for the new fast food shop.
Additionally
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, no changes
was
Change the verb form
were

The singular verb was does not appear to agree with the plural subject changes. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 detected with the bus stop and the main road.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Structure
  • Design
  • Facilities
  • Expansion
  • Renovation
  • Development
  • Aesthetics
  • Functionality
  • Enhancement
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Adaptability
  • Capacity
  • Optimization
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