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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider: -Say what the problem is -describe the accommodation you thought you were getting -ask the provider to solve the problem

#course #country #accommodation #provider #-say #-describe #-ask
Dear Sir, I
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 to inform you about the nature of the
accommodation
 that was provided to me CHANGE
PREPOSITION
 to us It seems that
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use
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 may be incorrect here. show examples CHANGE
PREPOSITION
 to us It seems that
preposition
 use may be incorrect here. show examples for a short course.
To begin
, I would like to
cease
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seize
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this
 opportunity to thank you for providing me with
shelter
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the shelter
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 to lay my head during
this
 short period.
However
 the
accommodation
 has been noticed to have these two major problems;
Firstly
, I realised, it's very far from the university where we run
course
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, as
such
this
 will make it almost impossible for me to get to the study venue at scheduled times,
Also
 the structure, the
accommodation
 is always very hot and
this
 makes it very unconducive for me to have a peaceful sleep after a very hectic day.
However
, I thought it is a type of
accommodation
 that will have a close proximity to the university for easy assessment and
cool
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 environment suitable for resting.
Furthermore
, I would sincerely appreciate it if the two major issues highlighted
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were
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 salvaged to enable me
have
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 full concentration in my studies. I look forward to hearing from you soon Yours Faithfully Anthonia
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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