The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. 

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph above illustrates information about how to transform clay into brick.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are five main stages in
this
process and it takes a lot of time and equipment;
moreover
, some steps require professional skills. A closer look at the diagram reveals that the process begins with collecting clay by using a digger;
next,
it will be filtered out of some mental grid by a net to purify it.
Moreover
, the clay will be added sand and water into it,
therefore
it can be easy to stereotype; not only by mould but
also
by a particular machine. After that, the stereotype bricks are gathered in one place and started to dry oven part,
this
part requires a lot of time(needed24 to 48 hours);
following
this
, these bricks go through the kiln stage it needs adjust to different temperature, from moderate step( temperature between 200 to 980 degrees) to high-temperature step(required about 870 to 1300 degrees). The
last
step in
this
stage is the cooling chamber may take 48 to 72 hours. In the final phase, the bricks will be packaged and
be
Unnecessary verb
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ready for use.
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