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The graph below gives information about the total oil use of 4 major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the total oil use of 4 major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph indicates the
oil
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consumption
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 of four regions from 2009 to 2030. The daily
oil
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 use is measured in millions of
barrels
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. In general, the US has been the leading
oil
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 consumer since 2009 and is anticipated to remain on top until 2030. Meanwhile, the daily
oil
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usage
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 of both
China
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 and the Middle East is predicted to have an inversely proportional pattern with Western Europe and Japan over the given 21 years. In detail, the US's
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consumption
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initially
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 was almost 10
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 which remained consistent until 2015. Oppositely, the Middle East and
China
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 were both the least
oil
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 users in 2009 in as much as half of Western Europe’s and Japan’s in the same year.
In contrast
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,
oil
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consumption
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 in
China
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 levelled with Western Europe and Japan in 2015 as the latter dipped to approximately 3
million
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 from 4
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 after 6 years. In the upcoming years, the daily
oil
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usage
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 of the US is projected to gradually decline by 6
million
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barrels
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 in 2030.
Similarly
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, Western Europe and Japan’s
consumption
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 is likely to
further
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 decrease to 2
million
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barrels
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 per
day
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 towards the final year.
In addition
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,
China
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's
usage
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 of
oil
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 each
day
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 is expected to peak in 2025 at roughly 4
million
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barrels
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 and by 2030 it is predicted to become equal with the Middle East at an estimated third of the US's
oil
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usage
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, consumption, barrels, usage, china, million, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • trend
  • significant
  • overall
  • notable
  • overview
  • comparisons
  • account for
  • represent
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