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Some believe that success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think that it depends on factors such as money or personal appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is a continuous argument that the main factors of achieving
success
 are caused by innate elements like
money
 and personal appearances or consist of persistent efforts. Personally, I believe that continuous hard work results in
success
. First and foremost, rich people don’t necessarily succeed in real society.
Although
money
 is one of the most important elements of
success
, making efforts allow people to achieve their promising future
success
.
For instance
, the CEO of Meta has become famous since he was a university student. Despite being an ordinary student, he established the company and gained enormous
money
 with a tremendous and sometimes insane effort, whose
success
 story became a popular movie.
Furthermore
, talents from parents can’t
also
 promise
one’s
success
.
For example
, Shunsuke Nakamura, who is a famous Japanese football player, has succeeded as a global professional soccer player, but five of his
children
 couldn’t become famous with their parent’s great talent.
This
 proves that
money
 and innate talents won’t promise
success
.
On the other hand
, innate factors can lead to
one’s
success
 directly. An example is that most CEOs'
children
 are promised to become the next leader of the company. Compared to the other workers, having a good pedigree helps the
children
 to grab
success
 earlier.
However
, the definition of
success
 is not just one time but to keep achieving
one’s
 dream or gain a social position.
Although
 the
children
 can succeed immediately, even maintaining the current company’s situation requires second-generation CEOs to make efforts.
Therefore
, continuous hard work can achieve
one’s
 continuous
success
. In brief, even if superficial factors like personal appearance led to
one’s
success
,it won’t
last
 forever without any effort. Hard work behind the scenes allows people to achieve their
success
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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