You visit a sports centre regularly, and there is a problem with the changing rooms in it. You have complained about it several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter, •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is •say what happened the last time you complained •explain what you want the manager to do

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Dear Sir, Greetings, I hope

this

letter finds you well, I am writing to you concerning a problem with the dressing rooms in the centre. Actually, I have complained about

this

problem several times before, but nothing has changed. The cleaning issue has become annoying,

although

the cleaners are there the whole time, they do not give much care about floor cleaning or cupboards,

additionally

, the lights do not work properly and most of them are damaged.

Therefore

the

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night

hours

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we can not use the dressing rooms.

Nevertheless

, I sent over three letters to the supervisor complaining about cleaning issues, He did not do anything in

this

regard,

hence

I decided to speak to you directly.

Finally

, I would like to suggest some solutions, first of all, fixing all

damaged

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lights,

moreover

, changing

helpers

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staff with other qualified workers who commit to doing their job properly. I am looking forward to your kind reply. Best Regards. Omar San.

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coherence cohesion

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task achievement

Expand on possible consequences of the issue and mention your expectations more clearly. Example: elaborate how these issues are affecting the centre's attendees.

task achievement

Polite and professional tone is maintained throughout the letter.

coherence cohesion

Good logical structure with a clear progression of ideas.

coherence cohesion

Greetings and closing are properly done, enhancing the overall professionalism of the letter.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

160 words

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