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The graph shows average household expenditure in 2019 and 2020.

The graph shows average household expenditure in 2019 and 2020.
#household #expenditure
The given pie charts depict the average household expenditure in a 1-year
reporting
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 from 2019 to 2020. It can be seen that
,
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 expenditure
food
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on food
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 shows
high
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a high
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figure
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figures
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 in both charts between 2019 and 2020 which is from 41% to 55%. . when comes to housing, it shows almost similar figures in both pie
chart
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charts
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.
However
 health Care illustrate 5 proportion in 2019, but
it
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 significant increase to 20% . In ,contrast education shows a higher percentage in 2019
however
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 it decreased to two per cent as Production Services rise from 7% to 18% in a year between 29 and 2020. Explain that your food
the
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has the
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most
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higher
thenks
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than
 rather than other information. Which
55
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is 55
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%
of
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in
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2019
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the 2019
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 year and 41%
of
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in
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 2020.
Overall
, It's clear that
,
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apply
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 the
most high
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highest
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 proportion show food
while
most
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apply
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decrease proportion figure shows Health Care in both
graph
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graphs
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in
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for
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 a year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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